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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Oct. 24 2011 at 10:58 am
MarieLouiseA SILVER, Newmarket, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Nothing&#039;s Impossible, The world is your dream.<br /> In your eyes, the sky&#039;s a different blue.

This is a great piece of work. (: If anyone could read some of my work and give me some feedback i'd really appriciate it, im new to this (:

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on Oct. 23 2011 at 9:04 pm
KatyPie97 GOLD, Eatonville, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
We&#039;re going to need a bigger boat

You started off very strong, and it could have been amazing! But I felt as if you rushed into the end, trying too hard to finish. It is a great poem, still; just take your time and let the words flow:)

on Oct. 23 2011 at 7:57 pm
ThePhoenixRising BRONZE, Macomb, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
It&rsquo;s not that I&rsquo;m so smart, it&rsquo;s just that I stay with problems longer.<br /> &mdash;Albert Einstein<br /> Insanity: doing the same thing over and over again and expecting different results.<br /> &mdash;Albert Einstein<br /> I don&rsquo;t know the key to success, but the key to failure is trying to please everybody.<br /> &mdash;Bill Cosby<br /> Quidquid latine dictum sit, altum sonatur. (Whatever is said in Latin sounds profound.)<br /> &mdash;Unknown Author<br /> Computers are useless. They can only give you answers.<br /> &mdash;Pablo Picasso

I know when I write this it's going to be redundant, because everyone already wrote it, but it really leaves me thinking!

The part of the chain, it made me think of the title itself, Daddy's Womb. But why?


on Oct. 23 2011 at 7:46 am
JamesODalaigh BRONZE, Bandon, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Ever tried. Ever failed. No matter. Try Again. Fail again. Fail better -Samuel Beckett.<br /> Don&#039;t be seduced into thinking that that which does not make a profit is without value -Arthur Miller.

Simply brilliant! Please never stop.

 


on Oct. 22 2011 at 7:31 am
pens-are-mightier-than-swords SILVER, Caledonia, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;we often put up walls not to keep people out, but to see who cares enough to break them down&quot;<br /> ~Author Unknown

Absolutely breathtaking! Amazing, outstanding job! Sad, but very vivid and relatable. Keep on writing!

on Oct. 20 2011 at 9:56 pm
Anabelle BRONZE, Orion, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
\&quot;There is always some madness in love. But there is also always some reason in madness.\&quot;<br /> Friedrich Nietzsche

Love this poem. The end leaves me wondering though. I felt a sense of...almost acceptance that the narrator was bound. But it was still very sad too. Loved it though!

 


on Oct. 20 2011 at 9:31 pm
Dimand_Tears. BRONZE, Oroville, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; How doth the little crocidle &quot;

Wow . Beautifully written, and quite umm, how do you say?? Poetic.

matthewzipf said...
on Oct. 19 2011 at 8:42 pm
matthewzipf, Silver Spring, Maryland
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This is a truly great poem.

on Oct. 18 2011 at 5:10 pm
Artemis--Sherwood GOLD, Hemet, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;We&#039;re all stories in the end.&quot;

I'm not sure exactly what the meaning is, but it makes me think. That's always good. :)

on Oct. 18 2011 at 4:47 pm
soniaeli141 BRONZE, New York, New York
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Wonderful poem. =) Feel free to take a look at mine.

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on Oct. 18 2011 at 4:31 pm
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.&rdquo;<br /> &quot;Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger.&quot;

good poem    

on Oct. 18 2011 at 1:28 pm
Natasha1994 SILVER, Arizona City, Arizona
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this is a good poem

BoBbY said...
on Oct. 18 2011 at 10:14 am
This Was An Amazing Poem (5 *'s). It Really got Me Thinking About The Meaning Behind It Still Thinking About It As I Write This!!

on Oct. 18 2011 at 8:05 am
BrittaneyPeacock DIAMOND, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Be yourself and never change for no one, If they can&#039;t except you for you then don&#039;t have them&quot;.<br /> &quot;Go after your dreams, do whatever it takes to get there and never let go&quot;. &quot;Live life to the fullest cause there is never tomorrow&quot;.

This is a great Poem you did, keep up the great work.

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on Oct. 17 2011 at 6:58 pm
East17 BRONZE, Brunswick, Maine
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Favorite Quote:
love is like bubbles, it makes me smile<br /> -double bubble boy XD

This is great, return the favor and comment on mine? :) it would be greatly appreciated

on Oct. 15 2011 at 4:46 pm
RandomRanda GOLD, Paoli, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Ill never improve, if i don&#039;t try <br /> I&#039;m Dancing for my life (im living my life). <br /> Im all me! NO ONE is changing me!

they havnt added them yet

 


sumleng GOLD said...
on Oct. 14 2011 at 7:22 pm
sumleng GOLD, Wayne, New Jersey
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Wow, that's beautiful. Makes me think

on Oct. 14 2011 at 6:34 pm
SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
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Great job! This poem really made me think. And... speaking of poetry... go check out mine! I only have two, so it's not too hard...

on Oct. 14 2011 at 12:02 pm
MissUnderStood.2011 BRONZE, Sugarhill, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Romans 12:2-4 Read It!!

you dont have an poems -__-

on Oct. 14 2011 at 11:39 am
CrystalMarie GOLD, Steubenville, Ohio
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This poem is amazing!