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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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sassypoet555 said...
on Mar. 11 2010 at 10:02 am
Very good use of symbolism throughout your poem.

timmyb said...
on Mar. 11 2010 at 10:02 am
this is so true

bigpapa said...
on Mar. 11 2010 at 10:00 am
This is AMAZING!!!!!!! keep up the good poems!!!

joshow said...
on Mar. 11 2010 at 9:57 am
this is a great poem

LaReSt said...
on Mar. 10 2010 at 10:05 am
I have but it is a religious one. I am wating to see my work get published here. Hopefully it will be soon.

on Mar. 10 2010 at 7:57 am
allie.vgr1994 SILVER, Manton, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;People die...so love them everyday,<br /> Beauty fades...so look before it&#039;s gone,<br /> Love Changes...but not the love you give,<br /> And if you love, You will never be alone.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Every day is hard,<br /> Nobody knows how hard it is for me,<br /> every day is kewl tho.&quot;

I think it was one of the greatest things ever!!!!!! Have you writen anything like this?

on Mar. 10 2010 at 7:55 am
allie.vgr1994 SILVER, Manton, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;People die...so love them everyday,<br /> Beauty fades...so look before it&#039;s gone,<br /> Love Changes...but not the love you give,<br /> And if you love, You will never be alone.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Every day is hard,<br /> Nobody knows how hard it is for me,<br /> every day is kewl tho.&quot;

Yeah it was great I would agree!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥

on Mar. 10 2010 at 7:53 am
allie.vgr1994 SILVER, Manton, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;People die...so love them everyday,<br /> Beauty fades...so look before it&#039;s gone,<br /> Love Changes...but not the love you give,<br /> And if you love, You will never be alone.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Every day is hard,<br /> Nobody knows how hard it is for me,<br /> every day is kewl tho.&quot;

It was really good!!!!!! I really love people who express their feelings in that way!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥

ToyRe GOLD said...
on Mar. 9 2010 at 6:58 am
ToyRe GOLD, Monterey, California
12 articles 3 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;This too shall pass.&quot; and &quot; When God leads to a cliff, jump, because He&#039;ll either catch you or teach you how to fly.&quot;

It's saying how a parent can tell you you can do anything and/or be anything but in the end they are the ones who try to hold you back be it for a reason like they aren't ready for you to go or selfish reasons.

ToyRe GOLD said...
on Mar. 9 2010 at 6:56 am
ToyRe GOLD, Monterey, California
12 articles 3 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;This too shall pass.&quot; and &quot; When God leads to a cliff, jump, because He&#039;ll either catch you or teach you how to fly.&quot;

This is one of the best poems I have read. Good Job!!!

on Mar. 8 2010 at 9:40 pm
chrissmd SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
7 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you find yourself in love with a person who does not love you, be gentle with yourself. There is nothing wrong with you. Love just didn&#039;t choose to rest in the other person&#039;s heart.&quot;

this is so good... i love the symbolism you used. great job!

on Mar. 8 2010 at 4:35 pm
justbreathe.... BRONZE, N/a, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
No matter how bad things get, there is always something that you don\&#039;t know about just yet.

I really like it. And apparently so does everyone else. 473??!! Keep up the good work!

on Mar. 8 2010 at 4:25 pm
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
70 articles 0 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life&#039;s a mountain on a beach&quot;-Unknown<br /> &quot;Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It&#039;s remarkable how often those two traits coincide.&quot;-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

lol, it's ok. Imagery is good

adam17 said...
on Mar. 8 2010 at 11:45 am
adam17, Parkesburg, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
hi

i dont get it

on Mar. 8 2010 at 9:03 am
CHEERLEADER~4~life BRONZE, Parkesburg, Pennsylvania
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i really liked your poem...keep up the good work!!!!

:D

on Mar. 7 2010 at 8:47 pm
peace.frog.271 BRONZE, Pinehurst, North Carolina
3 articles 2 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Let us remember as we chase our dreams into the stars that our first responsibility is to our Earth, to our children, to ourselves.&quot; -George W. Bush <br /> <br /> This means to me that before we let ourselves fade, we must take care of ourselves and others.

er... imaginary, or imagery? sorry, I have a sick case of OCD.. hehe

Wayne92 GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2010 at 9:08 am
Wayne92 GOLD, Beaumont, Texas
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Your poem was very visual the picture of a boy wanting to go beyond grounds but at the end you was bound heck ima be able to write like this amazing keep it up

on Mar. 4 2010 at 7:51 pm
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
70 articles 0 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Life&#039;s a mountain on a beach&quot;-Unknown<br /> &quot;Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It&#039;s remarkable how often those two traits coincide.&quot;-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

I really love this, cool. It flows together good and the imaginary is awesome! :)

Ralin said...
on Mar. 4 2010 at 4:28 pm
Ralin, Columbus, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;We must listen before we can learn.<br /> We must learn before we can prepare.<br /> We must prepare before we can serve.<br /> We must serve before we can lead.&rdquo;

i thought that your piece is beautifully put together. i love the way you let your thoughts out on paper... or online lol like i do. u should try to enter in on a contest

liblib33 GOLD said...
on Mar. 3 2010 at 8:28 pm
liblib33 GOLD, Dedham, Massachusetts
18 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life sucks then you die-- yeah I should be so lucky.<br /> --Jacob &quot;Breaking Dawn&quot;

I could only wish to write something like this. Great job!!!!