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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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eddys96 SILVER said...
on Feb. 28 2012 at 8:00 pm
eddys96 SILVER, Sacramento, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Perfection is achieved, not when there is nothing more to add, but when there is nothing left to take away.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Antoine de Saint-Exup&eacute;ry<br /> <br /> Don&#039;t Be Afraid if things seem difficult in the beginning. That&#039;s only initial impression.. The Important things is not the Retreat; You have to Master Yourself

Wow this is good. Can you guys CHECK out my poem please? im new at this and wanna GROW little by little. So im in need of five star ratings.

NoLi123 GOLD said...
on Feb. 25 2012 at 10:21 pm
NoLi123 GOLD, Scarsdale, New York
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This was a very well written poem. I like the to-the-point style shown here; not excessively long, yet has its share of imagery. 
I recently started writing poetry of my own; could someone please read my poems and post some comments? 

Maddyw5 GOLD said...
on Feb. 21 2012 at 5:22 pm
Maddyw5 GOLD, South St. Paul, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;With brave wings, she flies&quot;

Amazing. Just amazing. Keep up the good work!

Mani2x SILVER said...
on Feb. 18 2012 at 6:46 pm
Mani2x SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
I was born an original, I&#039;m not going to die a copy.

I heard/saw this poem somewhere else....

on Feb. 18 2012 at 10:29 am
BabyBlue04 BRONZE, Mauk, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
If you think I am quiet, then you are not good enough to hear my voice XD I was voted most quietest in my Senior Class. c/o 2012!! Woot woot!

This poem was awesome. I liked the flow! :)

eddys96 SILVER said...
on Feb. 17 2012 at 8:40 pm
eddys96 SILVER, Sacramento, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Perfection is achieved, not when there is nothing more to add, but when there is nothing left to take away.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Antoine de Saint-Exup&eacute;ry<br /> <br /> Don&#039;t Be Afraid if things seem difficult in the beginning. That&#039;s only initial impression.. The Important things is not the Retreat; You have to Master Yourself

this poem has good imagery. i like it

22711 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 15 2012 at 7:04 pm
22711 BRONZE, Reynoldsburg, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Love is like a flower, give it time and it will grow&quot;

This is an awesome poem. I hope to get a lot of views and comments someday

on Feb. 14 2012 at 3:27 pm
Let-Love-In PLATINUM, Chester, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;You fail only if you stop writing.&quot;

I have no words. this is so beautiful and well written, the imagery is amazing and the flow is incredible. awesome job! definitely keep writing.

on Feb. 11 2012 at 2:53 pm
RoseCartier BRONZE, Rockbridge, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Doctor doctor, guess what?! Demented people travel in herds!&quot;- me

i like it alot! new favorite

vail09 SILVER said...
on Feb. 8 2012 at 1:14 pm
vail09 SILVER, Austell, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
*love is not lost just simpily forgotten*

ill do it if you wish. before hand i want to say..im not a rude person if i dont like something ill tell it easily

vail09 SILVER said...
on Feb. 8 2012 at 1:12 pm
vail09 SILVER, Austell, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
*love is not lost just simpily forgotten*

that was wonderful...may i ask what inspired you?

on Feb. 8 2012 at 12:24 pm
BraxtonLangstonChapman SILVER, Lexington, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Dedication, Hard Work

This is really good and I want to get to this level, can someone judge some of my poetry and tell me something I need to work on.

NickyJ BRONZE said...
on Feb. 6 2012 at 9:08 pm
NickyJ BRONZE, Hyde Park, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;In three words I can sum up everything I&#039;ve learned about life: it goes on.&rdquo; ~Robert Frost

We need more poetry like this floating around.

on Feb. 6 2012 at 2:40 pm
ryanryanryan BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
ghandi

This was exremely well written and had great imagery.

ThinkGeek72 said...
on Feb. 6 2012 at 2:40 pm
ThinkGeek72, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Very interesting and different! I loved it!

on Feb. 6 2012 at 2:35 pm
Alyssa897 BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Great imagry and overall really well writen!

on Feb. 6 2012 at 2:33 pm
ImCoolerThanYou, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Very very well written. Great imagery and good details. You can see it in your mind.

on Feb. 6 2012 at 2:30 pm
ryanryanryan BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
ghandi

very well written, has good imagery, amazing flow

Slafyg BRONZE said...
on Feb. 6 2012 at 9:47 am
Slafyg BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Nice imagery

on Feb. 6 2012 at 9:39 am
tdotcooley SILVER, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Gravity, is working against me and wants to bring me down&quot;

Very well written and relates to many important realizations in life.