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The Christmas surprise

December 29, 2012
By Corbster PLATINUM, Menlo, Washington
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I've waited for this day for 364 days I've hadChristmas lights up in my room for 2 yearsChristmas is my favorite Holliday I wake up early Christmas morning and go downstairs I wait for my family to get up and we start to unwrap gifts I get cloths and socks then mom and dad go upstairs and bring my sister and I one more gift they were iPads.

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ladybugsrock SILVER said...
on Dec. 31 2012 at 2:06 pm
ladybugsrock SILVER, Billings, Montana
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&quot;Do not go where the path may lead; go instead where there is no path and leave a trail.&quot; <br /> -Ralph Waldo Emerson

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I really like the idea of this poem! It shows off your Christmas spirit... some advice I would give you would be, every time that you start a new sentence, put it on a new line. That way, the reader can read your poem easier. Also, I'm not sure how old you are and so this will apply to your age, but if there's one thing that can help A LOT in writing, it is learning words.. it sounds boring but poetry can improve a lot with good vocabulary. So, I hope this wasn't too long, and I hope you continue to write because you have the potential of being a GREAT writer! If you wouldn't mind, please check out some of my work as well! Read, comment, and rate it! I would appreciate it!